Byrd-S03-EP312 Storyboard Revisions


Sometimes boards come in, and they aren't clear enough. We work with a variety of board artists, and revisions are normal. Here are some examples of storyboard panel revisions, before and after.

Before Revision
Shot 88
Poet is supposed to be a hero "talking tough," but he looks empty and weird.
Is he supposed to be a ghost??
After Revision 
Shot 88
Look out, bad guys.

Before Revision
Shot 21
Sad kid, Derrick. No emotion.
He should share his feelings, not hide them; and what does that finger mean?
However, I kept the lower arm pose, to protect his feelings a little.

After Revision
Shot 21
Says it all.
Before Revision
Shot 23
Lily, an aristocratic girl, gives sympathy to sad kid, Derrick.
This gesture is not appropriate for the character, or her intentions.
After Revision
Shot 23
Gesture with graceful arcs, friendly open hand.

Before Revision
Shot 35
Bad Guys hiding in bushes.
Unclear emotions, and I can't even recognize the characters.




After Revision
Shot 35
Leader more dominant in composition, proportions corrected, acting clearer.


Before Revision
Shot 70
Thief #1 sneaking through house, knocks over a vase.
Before Revision
Shot 71
Thief #2 catches vase.
Unclear composition, wrong character emphasis, wrong camera angle,
Thief #2 is too far away from the table; action is not clearly staged.
After Revision
Shot 70 -Panel 1
After Revision
Shot 70 -Panel 2
Thief #1 sneaking through house, not paying attention, 
mid-shot
 After Revision
Shot 70 -Panel 2
Thief #1 knocks over vase
After Revision
Shot 70a -Panel 1
Cut to C/U 
Vase falling...
After Revision
Shot 70a -Panel 2
Vase falls out of frame 
After Revision
Shot 71 -Panel 1
Cut to mid-shot
Thief #2 SLIDES into shot like a bullet!
After Revision
Shot 71 -Panel 2
After Revision
Shot 71 -Panel 3
Thief # 2 catches pot
After Revision
Shot 71 -Panel 4
Fast zoom out

After Revision
Shot 71 -Panel 5
...reveals what just happened, 
and shows both character's reactions, more clearly





Just some of the stuff we deal with every day... 

(This is why we do all our video reference at storyboard stage now :)