Sometimes boards come in, and they aren't clear enough. We work with a variety of board artists, and revisions are normal. Here are some examples of storyboard panel revisions, before and after.
Before Revision Shot 88 Poet is supposed to be a hero "talking tough," but he looks empty and weird. Is he supposed to be a ghost?? |
After Revision
Look out, bad guys. Shot 88 |
After Revision
Says it all. Shot 21 |
Before Revision Shot 23 Lily, an aristocratic girl, gives sympathy to sad kid, Derrick. This gesture is not appropriate for the character, or her intentions. |
After Revision
Shot 23 Gesture with graceful arcs, friendly open hand. |
Before Revision Shot 35 Bad Guys hiding in bushes. Unclear emotions, and I can't even recognize the characters. |
After Revision
Shot 35
Leader more dominant in composition, proportions corrected, acting clearer.
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Before Revision
Shot 70 |
Before Revision
Shot 71Unclear composition, wrong character emphasis, wrong camera angle, Thief #2 is too far away from the table; action is not clearly staged. |
After Revision
Shot 70 -Panel 1 |
After Revision
Shot 70 -Panel 2
Thief #1 sneaking through house, not paying attention,
mid-shot |
After Revision
Shot 70 -Panel 2 Thief #1 knocks over vase |
After Revision
Shot 70a -Panel 1Cut to C/U Vase falling... |
After Revision
Shot 70a -Panel 2
Vase falls out of frame
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After Revision
Shot 71 -Panel 1
Cut to mid-shot
Thief #2 SLIDES into shot like a bullet! |
After Revision
Shot 71 -Panel 2 |
After Revision
Shot 71 -Panel 3Thief # 2 catches pot |
After Revision
Shot 71 -Panel 4Fast zoom out |
After Revision
Shot 71 -Panel 5...reveals what just happened, and shows both character's reactions, more clearly |
Just some of the stuff we deal with every day...
(This is why we do all our video reference at storyboard stage now :)